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Friday
11Jan2008

In The Field, 1987

You stand in that field
with the spring crop just reaching your knees
where your shorts end.
You have that skin,
the kind we have before we've been in car accidents
and stretched our mouths around other people
and smoked drugs in the outfield,
that kind that plumps over your bones
and takes the sun into itself.
The scrape from the rock you fell against
will taste oily and metallic when you stop to notice it,
and you will hope it will scar before fall.
I can taste it from here.

It was soundless;
at least, that is how I remember it
as I stare at this three-hole punch.
I think the grass scraped edge on edge,
and there must have been that sound of the breeze
running over the well of my ear,
but I do not remember it.
I do remember how far along the field you were
picking at seedheads.
You had forgotten about my following
and fingered yourself absently through your pocket.

I stood there once
with a toy car in my hand,
keeping my distance from the men who rolled wheat heads
and squinted against the dry air blowing off the highway.
One day I would be them, I thought,
and I plotted the cap I would wear
and whether I would chew grain
or let a thin stalk twizzle from my mouth.
That was then.

We are all three deep:
inside, outside, make-believe.
I watch your eyes go inward
while your lips move words to something there
away from the Doppler sounds of moving cars
where your shoulders are not burning
in the high sun.

I am a participant in Read Write Poem and Blog 365.

Reader Comments (12)

This one is the shizzle.

January 11, 2008 | Unregistered Commenterpalinode

That's really beautiful.

January 11, 2008 | Unregistered Commenterdaysgoby

I love this.

January 12, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterNora

Hey, you're a talented writer! Your voice sounds fresh, original, youthful, plus you tell a great story.

January 14, 2008 | Unregistered Commentermariacristina

The shizzle, indeed! A real winner, this one. Too many favorite bits to quote. The whole thing, I guess.

Thank you!

January 14, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterSB

I especially like that description of skin in the first stanza! But the whole thing is wonderfully written!

January 14, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterLinda

I have to read this ten more times. It is beautiful.

January 14, 2008 | Unregistered Commenter...deb

I read it twice. Reading something new each time. I wioll come back for more..

One of the best posts of this week's Read Write Prompt.

January 14, 2008 | Unregistered Commentergautami tripathy

A fine sense of time & place.

January 15, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterDick

This is lovely, real atmosphere

January 15, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterCrafty Green Poet

Dick said it best for me. The images you paint sing. I'm a city girl and I swear I was there in the field and was the boy plotting the cap he'd wear.

And like Deb, I keep rereading it. That's poetry.

January 16, 2008 | Unregistered Commentersusan

The lines that speak to me the most are:

"You have that skin,
the kind we have before we've been in car accidents
and stretched our mouths around other people
and smoked drugs in the outfield,
that kind that plumps over your bones
and takes the sun into itself."


Oh ~ there is plenty to admire in this poem ~ thanks for sharing it :)

January 17, 2008 | Unregistered CommenterBB

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